An stunning discovering was found in Children's park at Christmas eve. People go there after buying Christmas presents, so that this place is constantly visited by homeless children with the intention to ask for coins.
Although that afternoon just a few coins have been given to the children, an amazing solution to children's hungry and Christmas wishes, was dug up by a dog. A 6 feet-high box rose from earth, it was full of candies, chocolates, toys and clothes. Children were fascinated with this presents, till the box was stolen by the people around.
Children's dreams seemed to be killed by people's avarice, until a man dressed in red encourage people to leave the place.
Children had the best night of their lives, enjoying all the presents found inside the box. An special treasure hidden for them.
Hi Nicole!
ResponderEliminarI love your story, is really beautiful. But I am not here to make you feel good about yourself, actually is the other way around jajaja.
I found a few mistakes in your text:
1-."An stunning", should be "A stunning"
2-. "discovering", should be "discovery"
3-."so that this place", should be, "so this place"
4-. "An special" should be "A special"
That is all.
See you tomorrow
Hi Nicole, I agree with Anita, it was a beautiful story. it was well developed and written. However,I found some mistakes in the text. For example, when you said a few coins have been given, you should have said had been given, because you talked about that afternoon.
ResponderEliminarbye, see you.
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